You can see when there soccer games, basketball games, football games, etc. There is always fights between the fans of one team vs the fans of the other team and they fight. Each time its getting harder to change the violence in here in the world.
One of my most wish are peace on earth and that the earth is clean. There a lot of contamination, it is causing the extinction of many species of animals and the global warming. I hope that one day my dreams could come true and all the population of the world would be much better and we would have a better life style.
I agree with you. In this modern world there is fight in almost every where. Humans fight for almost everything. Sports, politics, territory, etc. If the world wouldn't have fights, we would live in a most peaceful place. You need to be careful on grammar and spelling. I like this topic.
ResponderEliminarI agree Pedro Pablo, this is a new world that everyone wants to change it, and live in peace, but this is how we made our world in this days. Living like we like now a days is how we created and the people we maintain. A great world shouldn't have fights or any kinds of wars for no reasons. Now in days people fight for no reasons or for showing who is the best, or the strongest one, to impress people or something.
ResponderEliminarHello Pedro Pablo, I think you should check your posts twice because I find many problems while I was reading this post. It is true that there's a lot of violence on our planet, but there's kindness too. The world is not only war, there are people helping other unfortunate people. Some examples can be when the earthquake on Haiti occurred, all the people from many counties helped them, with water, food, medication and many other things. It is nice that you wish the global peace and a world free of pollution, but we would have to work a lot to achieve that challenges.
ResponderEliminarI really liked you description of your perfect world. I really appreciate that you don't want war and
ResponderEliminarharmful stuff to happened. I really liked you idea that you don't want extinction to happened in the
animals. In your description of your idea of a perfect world, you mentioned that you wanted everything
to be clean and no population, I really liked that idea, that would help a lot to the world, it would make
our life's easier, and no harmful stuff would happen. I really think you did a great job, but I would like you
to put more information or facts about your idea of a description of your perfect world. Good job Pedro Pablo!
you did a great job.
The only thing I can say about this is that it need some serious correcting. Not only there are lot of spelling and grammar mistakes, but it blurs the whole essay. I could barely understand what you're talking about. You have some sentences that really don't have anything to do with the subject. In conclusion, this essay is a work in progress and perhaps you could correct it.
ResponderEliminarTo tell you the truth I did not understand most of it. For me it was pretty random and your ideas are not organized. The lack of vocabulary makes the *essay* very boring. From what I understood, you want peace and love. Apparently many people want this but none will accomplish that dream in many years. I think that this is a vague dream of many people. Nevertheless, I would still want that to come true. Thats all I can say.
ResponderEliminarPedro I like the topic you chose but you have to write more about it. I feel you need to explain your ideas a little bit more. you can talk more about solutions for this problems. You can also talk about your opinions and other people's. You can also talk about physiological war. Another thing you need to do is proofread so you don't have spelling and grammar mistakes.
ResponderEliminarI agre with what you are saying Pedro. A PERFECT WORLD WOULD BE LIEK AN UTOPIA, BUT WELL YOU GOT A DDIFFERENT OIPINION WHICH I AGREE WITH. PEDRO GREAT DECRIPTION METHODS AND GREAT WAY OF USING THE IMAGINATION. and the idea you have of a perfect world is great pedro, i hope everyone could think as you do. although everyone got a different opinion and there arent things that i agreree mostly with but perdo i can notice you are intrested on the topicv and you knwo what you RE TAKLKING AOBUT.
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ResponderEliminarYou still have a lot of spelling and grammar errors! I have been telling you for the last couple blogs to PROOFREAD your work, please. You change subject very often without a real meaning of anything important. You should stick to one topic in particular and talk about it. Put some more effort into it, Pepa!
ResponderEliminarThis is a great story. A perfect world is a place where world peace existed. This perfect world should be where the family values are more important, rather than money or power. Unfortunately, humans have an instant of fighting and becoming better than others. I agree, contamination has to stop. We are destroying our planet, can you imagine how is the world going to be when the grandchildren of our grandchild life?? D: It will be very bad if we continue this way. I notice great emprovement in your spelling and grammar. God Work.
ResponderEliminarVery good ideas. You touched on some serious problems that the world has. I really don't think that this will ever happen. I bet you could solve some smaller problems such as sicknesses. You need to re-read your writing. I can guarantee that if you re-read your work, you would get a much better grade. Nice length of the essay. All in all good job.
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