jueves, 22 de abril de 2010

Earth day "air pollution"

The earth is confronting very serious problems, but theres one that you cant see, that problem is air pollution. 40 years ago was the first earth day. They did it because there were river that were catching in fire, Or the river and oceans were so contaminated that if you got in the water you had to go an got checked by the doctor. 40 years ago very few people were worried abbot our planet, but 40 years later and over time more people are getting worried about our planet. People are not concern about the different ways hey affected the planted. So in this essay i am going to talk about air pollution.

Air pollution is a very important reason of the global warming. bEACUSE YOU CAN´T see it and the carbon dioxide is the reason number 1 of air pollution. You cant notice that because you cant see the air. But every body contaminates in the earth. This is happening because the population of the humans is growing and the trees are getting each time less and less. So the plants are the ones that make the carbon dioxide to oxygen, thats what we need oxygen not carbon dioxide.

In the earth that we live in this time each time is getting more polluted by air pollution.it is ocurring because each time the humans population and huamns are the ones ho produce carbon dioxide. And trees are the one ho transform carbon dioxide to oxygen. So the popuylation of humans is growing and the number of trees are getting lower. So later we are not going to brearh becausre there would be no air, we would be using oxygen mask like the ones you use when you go and snorkle. Mybe as time passing and we the humas population gerowing and the trees numbers dreamatically drecasing the oxygen level is dicrasding and the oxygen as well.

Air pollution is not only composed by carbon dioxide. It can be compused too by smoke that factories make. Or it can be compuse by smoke from burning trash. Or fossil fueld or chermicals or forest fire. So they are alot of types of chemicals or smoke that can make air pollution

In cunclicion if we want our kid kids live in a good place we have to stop cuttring a lot but a lot of trees
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14 comentarios:

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  2. The essay was actually good. Despite that it was good, it needs some major spell check. There are times that you can't understand what you're trying to say. Apart from the technical mistakes, you might have made the essay a bit bigger, because you had so many ideas that they got the reader mixed up. However, I do agree with you in the fact that our level of concern towards our enviroment has indeed increased over the years. Perhaps, after you make some corrections to the essay, your essay might be perfect.

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  3. The writing you made was good. It had good points of view and the theme was totally correct. You have major spelling and grammatical errors, perhaps if you correct them it would be better. I hope you can fix those things in the future. Besides, you use extra big font size, and that makes it look unprofessional.

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  4. Pedro, I agree with your topic about air pollution being a major problem for Earth. One thing that I can't help notice is your lazyness (without adding other words). You take information about 1 video and a science textbook. That is really lame and your eassay lacks of information. You explain one thing (barely) and the other you leave untouched. Also, what is wrong with your way of writing? Besides that it is horrible (the worst I've seen), you later one get a dark color backgroung and a dark color for your text font. The only thing I can do is laugh and just let it pass by as WE all know that this is the best you can do.

    Jorge, this essay is far from being perfect...

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  5. I do agree that now we are starting to care about the environment, because it is now that we see how damaged it actually is. People need to really show that they care, or else it is just a lot cause. Although, the spelling mistakes did make it really hard to understand at times. You should really read over your work. As I told Adriana, this also contributes to animals going extinct which is what I wrote about. It good that we share the healthy concern for our air contamination.

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  6. Pedro, compared to your other works this one is actually on of the best! Congratulations, but still don't get that excited yet. I think you should still get someone to check your work because you still have plenty of mistakes. You repeat to much "40 years ago". Air pollution, as you said, may be invisible. Still, have you traveled to Mexico City? You can't see the mountains that surround the city and the reason is because there is too much air pollution so it IS visible. Keep up the good work, Pedro. I bet you can do way better.

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  7. I absolutely agree that this is the worst kind of pollution. Most people will deny it but that's because it's not as visible as other problems and yet it's the most harmful. Thanks to carbon dioxide there is that awful hole in the atmosphere. It literally makes life impossible for humans. If we let this problem carry on there is a possibility that earth will not. We should become more conscious about everything we do. Don't buy packaged products, buy from a local market. Try not to throw away as many things. The factories release bad chemicals while making them. This is the same idea I have and I love it.

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  8. Please Pedro check your paragraphs before posting them. You should clarify your ideas because many people can get confused while they are reading this. Besides that your ideas are really good. I agree with you in many facts about pollution. Remember check your posts twice.

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  9. I agree with your air polluiton essay and that know, we actually care about our environment becauase we could see that is damaging it. Your ideas are fantastic, I could see that you put a lot of effort in it. You have a lot of creativity Pedro, I loved that you put challenging words but remember that you have to read your paragraphs and essays twice. Next time, you really have to check your work before posting it ok! Good job Pedro, I really enjoyed reading it. Keep on working on your work, its going to get better!

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  10. BY XIMENA
    couldnt agree more pedro, i mean we have to concern about the air pollution!Becasue its not just damaging us, but is damaging the environment, the flora and founa, and everything. We need clean air in order to be a clan and healthy planet. Lets all togeather lets save the world. I liked how you talked aobut why is air pollution bad, and how is it harming us. Its very interesting that you mentioned the effects of this issue, and what would it be the casues. I am also glad you are interested in this theme, and that you researhced and talk about your point of view pedro. I liked your convincent writing, that will probably encourage people to do something aobut this issue. And i just dont wanna say people in plural, or as if someone was gonna do something, but im saying people as my self. You are a great writer with great power to motivate the society.
    SAVE THE WORLD PEDRO(:

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  11. pedro I agree with most of my classmates you have strong idas but you have to suppor them with more information. your spelling also needs to be checked. You always have to proofread to have a great post. I like the idea you used for your essaay. Good job pedro you are improing your poss more and more

    raul

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  12. I agree with the same ideas you put on. Air pollution is the bigger one. We are destroying habitats for our benefit but we dont think about other animals that are suffering because of our lack of responsability. I love to read your blog post, and I like the idea that we wrote the same thing.

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  13. PEDRINI! well done. You understand the concept of air pollution and i guess you even had to reaserch a little to get all that iformation. We must be concerned in this topic because we breath what we are polluting so all thiose bad things, are comming back. Soemthing like natural Karma. I am concerened taht the next decade our life's will be threatened to suffere and extreme illnesses will kill humans. You use many strong loaded words but I recomed you use spell check so that it makes mroe sense. I think you are a great writer and that you have so many things to express. Humasn should take over this problem becuse it's making us not have teh provilege to say earth is OUR home if we are doing this things.

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  14. You understand the idea that air pollution is terrible for the earth. One thing I think you don't understand yet is checking over your work for mistakes. On this work I would give you a 6/10. If you had better spelling and grammar I would give you a 9/10. Or maybe you make mistakes on purpose so that you get all these comments.

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