jueves, 21 de enero de 2010
PART 6: Online Relationships -- Healthy or Unhealthy?
Online relationships i think they are unhealthy because you can lie to you. Peoplo do that because they are scared to se them in real life. They are shy of them self and their suppose boyfriend or girlfriend. That makes people to get frustrated because they are close in a room and they do nothing, They don't social with people in real life only on computers. They see the people only in a screen and they don't get that shay. Thats what i think about relationships online and i say they are not healthy.
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Pedro, I think that you are right, but still your spelling errors are a lot.
ResponderEliminarIn my opinion you have yo put more information or facts about your topic.
I thought it was very interesting but you need to put more stuff to prove
your point. I really liked it. Pedro, you repeat some words a lot. In my opinion
you have to use difficult words and you have to make it seem like there is
no second opinion or fact, that is only yours and point.
The first sentence doesn't make much sense. After Online Relationships you should put a comma and you don't say "you lie to you", you say "you lie to yourself." I think you should double check your work because you have many mistakes. Them self should be written themselves because it is in plural. Also, you wrote, "AND THEIR SUPPOSE BOYFRIEND OR GIRLFRIEND" which should be "AND THEIR SUPPOSED TO BE BOYFRIEND OR GIRLFRIEND." You should use the comma more often and re-read your work. I'd tell you all of your mistakes but that would take longer and I think that is the teachers' job. :) Still, something that I HAVE to tell you is that shy is actually written SHY and not SHAY, even though they may sound the same.
ResponderEliminarI don't agree to much with you. Some people can have a relation through internet for the reason that they live at different cities or countries, sometimes someone can have a relation through internet because he or she is a very shy person but that doesn;t happend always, still you have many many spelling misakes, you should check your work before reading it, that would help you to don't write too many errors.
ResponderEliminarYour paragraph does happen in real life but i Think you could improve it. First I think that you have to make it larger. It's brief and doesn't include as much information as you could have written. Another thing you can improve the spelling. I read your paragraph and saw that you had some mistakes. Some words you wrote where wrong. I think that you should read it 2 times so you can be sure you don't have mistakes. Even do you had some mistakes you did talked about the topic.
ResponderEliminarGreat job, I do believe the people simply lie on the internet and also insult because they don't fit in the real world. I have to say that your paragraph, regardless of being short is really good. I have to conclude by also adding,I like the personal(real world experiences)that you input into your text.
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